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Chang my derection


Author: Black-Death
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Words: 63
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Chang my derection



Good morning day... im sorry i coulnt make it today... all my freinds... gone.... i try and fly...... If i needed some help... if i needed some one to love me back... id change my ways... if i needed some one to kill me id change my derection before i drownd... drowned.... Good by day... sorry i coulnt make it today... Hello night...




Submitted on 2006-10-21 23:44:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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