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    dots Submission Name: DANCERSdots
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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 53
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Spring night
    Fire roars
    Cackles
    Whispers
    Breath strong with brew
    Heads turned up
    Heads bowed
    The scent
    Magnolia ?
    Orange blossom maybe?
    Breeze picks up the burning ash
    Carries it over our heads
    Cooling embers seem to come from no where
    Gently dying on closed eyelids




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 00:21:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one's wonderful in capturing the imagery of the moment! You took me there and I wanted more! Great job, Sharon :-)
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, really quite wonderful, you never need to mention the "dancers" as we all know from your beautiful and wonderful description.... bravo... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. Short and unusual form with distinct devotion to short lines but vivid adjectives. I would call this expressive. Definetly.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      that was really good you must have real skill most people would think this was rambling, but I thake it your taking about a bon fire and danceing around it. take skill to do something like that. but most people would not get this unless they had the same level of knolage. which my spelling dosen't show very well, but thats why we have word right?
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Ryou_Bakura | [ Reply to This ]


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