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    dots Submission Name: Scattered Ashesdots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 488
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 844



    Description:
       This was written not very long after my ex husband left. It isn't wonderful or anything, and I've revised what I thought didn't make sense, I just hope it isn't so jumbled up that the reader doesn't get my feelings here... Cause my emotions were a little chaotic when I wrote this lol. Enjoy
    (Revised ending...)


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    dotsScattered Ashesdots
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    Forgotten and left behind,
    My love for you slowly died,
    Sorrow crept over my soul,
    You took with you what made me whole,
    My heart lies in pieces on the floor,
    Shattered by the one I once adored.
    I gave you all I could do without,
    You left me here with no hope to doubt
    My heart combusted and cannot be healed,
    The pain and scars have been revealed
    My life has become nothing more,
    Than the pile of ashes on the floor.
    A shadow of your love still haunts my dreams
    And rips my heart up at the seams
    Sheltered within my mind somewhere
    I keep a thought of you to bear
    Years wasted on a painful lie
    You never loved me, now say goodbye
    My love for you has come and gone,
    Now, I'll scatter the ashes and move on.




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 02:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So many times we have have been hurt by the ones we loved? Sorry To hear about your heartbreak!
    This was a great poem and I think I will add it to my fav's because I went through something just like this. Thanks for sharring!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Something so personal and yet still, you made it rhyme without making it sound forced. I like that. The only line to me that was unclear was
    "I gave you all I could do without," I like how it sounds ...its just .. is this line before or after he left?
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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