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    dots Submission Name: the second time arounddots

    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe second time arounddots

    Are we going to do this again?
    Get involved despite the world
    Ignore the thoughts of men
    Fight off the systems chains
    Be ourselves and each other
    Forget all previous pains

    Are we going to talk about it?
    Realize the bridge, but swim
    Take time to talk and sit
    Ignore the easy way
    Break down every barrier
    Through night until the day

    Submitted on 2004-05-26 12:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This text is one long argument that has been maturing for a long time. You know how things just cumulate and at some point, it all breaks out?
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      This is not a riddle. I think that the slight vagueness in details is actually a good thing for this piece. From it I get a sense of stopping right in the middle of something and saying, "Wait just a second, What the hell are we doing?" It doesnt have to be about love or a relationship. To you personally, maybe it is, but the lack of concrete details in the piece allows it to be about any number of things for the reader. I like it!
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by pinurplepassion | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this because in away i have felt like this probably not the way you are talking but i can relate to it. nice write
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]

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