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    dots Submission Name: Lookdots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 355
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 604
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2305



    Description:
       This song is obviously about my dad..I know it kinda sucks but it the first song i've seriously written...I'm working on music for it...anyways comment (need help on title too)


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    (V1)
    Take a look at me
    What do you see?
    You see a little girl
    So innocent
    Take a look at me
    What do you see?
    You see a little girl
    who loves daddy
    Who loves her mother soo
    Now take a look at the back of your hand
    You'll see you know it
    Better then me

    (Chorus)
    And you don't And you won't
    You'll never understand me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never really know me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never be my daddy
    Your just a father to me

    (V2)
    Take a look at me
    What do you see?
    You see your baby girl
    Take a look at me
    What do you see?
    You see a lil girl
    Now take at the real me
    You'll see it's nothing
    Like you imagined

    (chorus)
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never understand me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never really know me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never be my daddy
    Your just a father to me

    (V3)
    I take a look at you
    What do I see?
    I see a little boy
    Who has no clue
    I take a look at you
    What Do I see
    I see a father
    Who doesn't know his daughter

    (chorus)
    Andyou don't and you won't
    You'll never understand me
    And you don't and you wont
    You'll never really know me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never be my daddy
    Your just a father to me

    (V4)
    I take a look at me
    What do I see?
    I see a woman
    Without a father yaa
    I take a look around
    What do I see?
    I see my mother
    Doing this alone

    (chorus)
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never understand me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never really know me
    And you don't and you won't
    You'll never be my daddy
    Your just a father to me




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 13:10:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      iv,e heard a lot of stuff like this before, that,s the generation gap everybody goes through it.parents don,t umderstand their kids and vice verse. i wen,t through it, now i am at the other end. your words remind me of my daughter she is thirteen and we fight sometimes but i always listen to her when she has a problem. i wish my daughter would put her frustration to paper like you are doing. it is a good outlet. the more you write the better you get so keep it up-a title what about : hear me :
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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