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    Author: Unicorn Poet
    ASL Info:    23/F/Salem, OR
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 406/272/46
    Words: 349
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 910
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I'm not sure about a title for this one..... And yes it really happened :) I know that it wasn't right, but in the end everything has worked out for the best.


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    All day long I think of you,
    Then I begin to cry,
    A love so special is what we have,
    We never had to try.

    It only took a little while,
    For the love in us to show,
    Though it's been a short time,
    It still continues to grow.

    The way you were always there,
    Even when you had things to do,
    Made me realize that in some way,
    You felt the same way too.

    I was so afraid to let you know,
    But when the time to tell you came,
    The words just flowed out of me;
    And now I'll never be the same.

    You accepted the way I felt,
    And reassured me that it was okay,
    You told me I had no need to fear,
    Because you felt the same way.

    To hear you tell me these sweet things,
    Was like a dream come true,
    I never thought a man so fine,
    Could ever feel this way too.

    You say that I'm your world,
    And want us to be one forever,
    Ah, but there's one problem:
    My husband and I are still together.

    It is such a hard thing to admit:
    I have love for my husband's best friend,
    I hope we can make it through this,
    And still be together in the end.

    You know he doesn't treat me right,
    I hear you tell him this every day,
    You say he needs to be a man and
    Give me love in a caring way.

    Somehow he doesn't seem to understand,
    You are just trying to help him out,
    You want to see hime happily in love,
    But his actions engender more doubt.

    I know you're trying to do what's right,
    But this is going to drive me insane,
    He could never change the way I've hurt,
    And my feelings for him aren't the same.

    I know that deep down in my heart,
    You were the one that was meant for me,
    The gods seem to have chosen our fate,
    I think we've found our destiny.




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 16:58:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ohh, love it! It just flows so well, and it almost tells a suspenceful story, so you keep reading on until you can figure out more of the "story".
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing twist. It flows well. I never lost interest. It reminded me of a movie of some sort.


    Kaitlyn
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i completely did not expect that! talk about a twist ending. i can relate except it was my best friend a guy and me he eventually married my best friend, and then the guy decided he made a mistake and wanted me, it was a mess and now we are no longer friends. the rythm what great and you completely kept my attention, great job i loved it....Joy
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it a lot. At first I thought you were just scared of how he would react to your feelings but then after I read further into the poem I understood why. I didn't expect it to be your husbands best friend. That's one of those twists in poems that make people want to read more!

    I'm glad that everything worked out for the best. I don't think I could handle reading something like this and then have to deal with an unhappy ending.

    Anywhooo! Great job!
    ```Chrissy```
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by XxXPromiseMeXxX | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! i didnt expect the turn in the middle where you love your husbands friend. but it was definetly a very good poem, with a good rhythm. i find it sad, and very romantic at the same time. im glad everything worked out for the best!
    muchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]


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