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    dots Submission Name: always, but never foreverdots
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    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 754
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       i still wish i was your only


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    dotsalways, but never foreverdots
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    should I?

    maybe if you promised you would love me-
    always and it doesn't even have to be forever

    just hold me, before you go to the others
    and don't forget me,
    because I'll never forget you.

    i wish you were mine always and only-
    because i would love you like no other

    all you have to do is kiss me,
    with your sugar coated words
    and hug me,
    passionately, promising forever
    but of course i can see it's a lie.

    i miss you, i wish you were mine like i thought you were before,
    because i was too naive to see the marks,
    too forgiving to taste it
    too forgetful to notice the lipstick-
    but always aware.

    i want to go back to pretending that it was our little secret, back to dancing in the backyard, back to kissing in the hallways when noone else was there.

    I want our kisses to be meaningful and lasting forever like before,
    because now it's too short, too late, too obvious and too much to bear.

    i wish you were only mine,
    because my forgiveness is limitless and you're just taking advantage-

    of all of me.




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 17:03:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      aww baby. you deserve someone that will love you and only you because you are lovely and awesome. i miss you. my nose itches.

    love and hugs and kisses (the realest kind..from bestest friends)
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      The title is a decent oxymoron :-) , it made me read this. I liked the form while the genre of love doesn't do much for me even though there were several occasions where I took it up on a dare and tryied it myself. You have a certain way with words. It would seem you're very good at it. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]


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