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Knife


Author: Black-Death
Elite Ratio:    1.18 - 18 /90 /139
Words: 77
Class/Type: Misc /Depressed
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Knife



Takes this knife and slowly cuts into his skin... watching the blood fall down... down on the floor.... no time to say goodbye.... no time for tears.... as i faded awway... as i faded into this darkness... as i left my life in this knifes hands... as i was getting out of life... as i was running... as the blood driped down... as i ran... as the blood followed... as i faded awway... no time for goodbye...




Submitted on 2006-10-22 18:01:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i felt that this person was depressed and hurt, although i couldnt tell why. but they seemed so alone. and i like how graffic it was.

-Death-
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]


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