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    dots Submission Name: shadowed reasoningdots
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    Author: lynxstarfire
    ASL Info:    26/Feline/MD
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 100/106/54
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsshadowed reasoningdots
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    darkness,

    covering the sky,
    as the windows to your soul,
    cloud with disconcerting imagery,
    leading you into the pit,

    they want,
    your soul,
    your breath,
    your power,
    your life,

    they fear,
    your light,
    your power,
    your voice,
    your life,

    they come with temptations,
    to tarnish you,
    to control you,
    to corrupt you,
    to break you to their will,

    they know,
    the time draws near,
    will you be prepared?




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 20:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hm, I diagree... I feel that this poem just... it lacked some gripping quality, to hold someone through... and it actually seemed rather blase and unoriginal : I think we've all written "they're coming for you" poems... and without either gripping language or something offbeat and original, it doesn't distinguish itself : sorry~ <3 Cora
    | Posted on 2006-12-05 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      well that,s pretty original, a good poem, well laid out, 3rd and 4th line i liked a lot. well done bye
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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