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    dots Submission Name: Kill the pain with a gundots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       A little poem about suicide. Thoughts plz.


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    dotsKill the pain with a gundots
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    Gun in my hand
    holding it to my head
    I'm giving up
    I want to be dead

    Pain racing through me
    People are so dumb
    If only they could see
    I've become so numb

    Life, the cruelty of it
    Seems to be too much
    Killing my pain violently
    With the razors every touch

    I'm tired of crying
    Faking a smile
    Always lying
    About how I feel

    Hiding behind a mask
    No one knows
    I don't know how long I can last
    I hope this doesn't show

    So I'm going to pull the trigger
    To send a bullet through my head
    I wonder who will care
    As I lay here dead




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      This is so great its haunting. I hope you aren't feeling this way cause i know i will miss you (granted i never met you but i do feel a sense of bondness) great write again.

    Delusionally Yours,
    Jay
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it i just can't grasp your concept. But still good write. And if you want your friend to leave you alone then just tell her and she will let you have space. And she might not mean to do it but she just might have to be with the people she loves because the world is so cruel. She is hurtting and that is why she is around so much. So next time tell her politly " I need some alone time because i aam confused right now....ok??" And even if your not confused she will understand. Even sometimes she needs to be alone she just might not reconize it at that moment.....Thoughts might help..... I love you


    Luv alway'z

    Kelsey annoying one.....
    | Posted on 2006-11-18 00:00:00 | by bleeding_sin | [ Reply to This ]


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