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    dots Submission Name: Liars.dots
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    Author: fabulousAMY
    ASL Info:    21/Female/CA
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 159/159/61
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Longing
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    dotsLiars.dots
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    I miss those days I was more than everything,
    I was the only thing, I mattered. I was beautiful, transformed, dear.
    Now it is not so, if I call I get your machine, or you demand a reason why I called just so you can say you're too busy to talk to me.
    Lowly me, little me, the girl who had your heart.
    Away in college, away in Siberia. Distant and cold, much like that heart that once held me in highest regards.
    Too easily I am now used, left alone, and discarded, a girl who is a used tissue.
    The taste of other, stranger, older boys burns in my throat.
    Stains and tears linger on pillows and sheets where kisses laced with alcohol and full of meaningless lust had taken place.
    I burn in your fire, a heratic, you light the fire, a heratic. How much we still have in common!
    I am nothing, you are nothing.
    We are liars.




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 21:22:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a great piece of writing. It shows a great deal of inner emotion. This expresses a lot of feeling and shows a lot of your heart and deeper thoughts. I really like this a lot. This is very well written. Props to you.

    Keep up the excellent writing.

    -Kamerin
    | Posted on 2007-01-13 00:00:00 | by Kamerin Brown | [ Reply to This ]


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