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    dots Submission Name: I Thought We Had An Understandingdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I'm not going to lie... I'm pretty pissed!


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    dotsI Thought We Had An Understandingdots
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    And here I thought we had an understanding..
    That you are a father figure...
    And just that?
    I thought we had an understanding that...
    Certain things simply are not appropriate...
    I suppose my rash thinking...That,
    "Everyone knows you don't touch family members in personal places"
    I figured...
    That was understood...
    Oh, but I am so wrong!
    You do not understand!
    And no matter how fucking hard I try to explain it...
    No matter how many dam shades of color my face turns
    Your thinking process will not!
    Will not change that is...
    And every morning I awake,
    I feel less and less of a person...
    Every afternoon
    I walk into this house-hold that we have labeled ours…
    Feels as if it’s a prison... within a prison…
    For I cannot escape,
    My guilt would over-whelm me...
    You have trapped me
    Within your box...
    And these strings you have attached to my legs and arms..
    Are your's to pull...
    So when you holler jump
    I shall jump..
    (Don’t bother asking how high.. that is now in your power)
    For I am no longer an individual...
    I am no longer myself...
    Simply another version of YOU!




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      WOW
    An amazing write
    Im so sorry that this has happened to you
    I will never understand how a parent can do such things to the one person who will always Love them no matter what
    This truly is a very sad story
    But sadly happens much to much in our World
    Please try to remain Positive
    I encourage you to stand up to this person and let them know that you simply are not going to take their abuse
    I hope their is someone you can turn to to help releive the pain
    Perhaps a school guidance Counselor or even an Officer of the law
    I have also noticed an incredible amount of writes lately here at Elite with this theme
    I hope To God Someone is Listening!!!!
    If you ever EVER need someone to talk to Please do not be afraid to Pm me
    Im always here
    God Bless
    I will Be Praying for you
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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