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    dots Submission Name: Snowgirldots
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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 503



    Description:
        A snowman that melted or a metaphor of a girl who's heart went cold. You choose.


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    dotsSnowgirldots
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    Her body fades away
    as the night turns into day
    the sunlight shines upon her
    her pale white face becomes a blur
    melting slowly, her smiles gone
    she'll disappear before dawn
    her arms and legs fall to the ground
    in the puddles of water, they will drown
    disappointed faces, stare at her grave
    the grave of the girl they couldn't save
    cold as ice, she didn't have a heart
    but my oh my, what a wonderful piece of art




    Submitted on 2006-10-22 21:26:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed reading this poem. It paints a great picture with its rich imagery. I really like the word choice and ryhming (sorry if i can't spell), it makes the poem move with a very interesting beat.
    | Posted on 2006-10-22 00:00:00 | by Sweet as Sugar | [ Reply to This ]


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