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    dots Submission Name: RedemptSIN part 2dots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1178
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1459

       Mix of poetry and lyrics...

    Reposted and revised....


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    dotsRedemptSIN part 2dots

    I'm drawn vicious into cycles to imbrue calamity with stained-hands
    crimsoned-dark, with conviction-of-heart is the optima of a sane-man
    disdained plans, of deranged scams, with more depth beyond a plain-man
    Iím vain-to-travel, till I fracture my constraints to have my chains-unravel
    I blame-the-shackles of inner demons for the reasons my knees are stained-by-gravel

    Limits-of paths-and-violent-dreams-encase-my-sanity;

    Trace the calamity to imprint the gestalt of sublime-chaos
    like medieval crusades divinity comes to blind-a-brave-cost
    peasants of pestilent pity persecute to paradigm-slaves-lost
    Lined-grave-troughs embody the victims without signs-of-a-blazed-cross

    Never held the black-chrome, but I will SIN to escape to get back-home
    cracked-bones to protrude-flesh, I stand against fate with balance like a cat-thrown
    Iím a crude-mess while I search to redeem and scheme lifeís delude-quest
    chronic feats cold futures of chambered fortunes like chaptered-cradles,
    feasts of coercion force culture of fortitude constructions like fractured-fables
    I blaze natures gift as an artisan, but like bi-racial partisans Iím ruptured-by-labels
    bled-to-contempt-sin like a deficient martyr of infinite renaissance who forsakes RedemptSIN

    Submitted on 2006-10-22 21:43:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dude... i see a lot of myself in that... nice one.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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