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Scar


Author: Black-Death
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Scar



Why do you remind me of theas scares im faceing... the scares that i know will slowly kill my sould... look deep in me youll see a child crying... dont look on my outer layer... look deep... deep.. past the wall that i have set up.... iv tryed so hard... and got so close to you... and got so close.... but in the end.. you killed it.. stabed it... now theas scares are getting infected with love... and there getting bigger.....




Submitted on 2006-10-22 22:11:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  now i may be wrong, but i feel a mix of emotions from this one, someof anger, and some of love. Mayber the person has been hurt by love, and still wants to love who hurt them. now i could be completely wrong. I did notice a few spelling errors, but thats okay

"the scares that i know will slowly kill my sould"

I think that you meant (Soul)

-Death-
| Posted on 2006-10-31 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]


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