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    dots Submission Name: Story Of A Girldots
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    Author: TeenaSuicide
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    0.54 - 12/12/11
    Words: 268
    Class/Type: Story/Betrayal
    Total Views: 707
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 1470



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       i guess u can call it a story. It isnt completely finished. I was bored during PSAT's so i started writing. i dont like but one of my friends do so tell me what you think....


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    dotsStory Of A Girldots
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    ok so there was this lil gurl. she had an ok life...or so she though she had no idea she was going to have a fucked up adolescence[sp?]. it was coming sooner or later. too bad it had to come so soon. its funny how one event can change someones veiw of life/future for eternity. thats what happened. that one day made her question everything anyone had ever told her about life, family, love ect. she was forcefully defloewred at the age of nine...to make matters worseit was done by her older cousin. she had no one to run to. she couldn't tell her "Friends", they'd laugh and think she was jokeingshe couldnt tell her family because she couldnt trust them.not after what 'family' just did to her. Well she tried to tell her mother but she didnt believe her. she thought she was trying to get attention, plus she was drunk. so she found confort in pain. it started by reopening scars. which led to actually makeing those scars aka cutting. the blade would never decieve her. and its always there when she needed it. in a period of seven years she was raped at LEAST twenty times, and each time she ran to the darkness or her basement and let her blood spill. so seven years later shes seven years older and he still haunts her thoughts. even though she has fled the state hes still in her somewhere. tearing her apart from the inside. but this time she has a stronger form of comfort. and no its not more pain. this time its love...




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      well....i dont particularly care for your style of writing here,soemthing about he way it was writtin doesnt ring true for me, doesnt really catch me....

    i am so sorry...it is merely the way i feel.....

    out of my curiousity, this is fiction, right?

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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