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    dots Submission Name: I'll Be Missing Youdots
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    Author: sweet_rayne
    ASL Info:    25/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 493/464/111
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Death
    Total Views: 1056
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    Bytes: 333



    Description:
       this is for my grandfather, who passed away atwo months ago, its a work in progress, and it has taken me the two months to actually write it, lol i tend to run from uncomfortable situations.


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    dotsI'll Be Missing Youdots
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    A life taken
    A hero has fallen
    His body is dead
    As his spirit is freed

    A smile on his face
    As his gentle voice speaks
    Then away on the wings
    Of an angel he flew

    A gentle man
    Its true he was
    But gone from sight
    Is the man we loved.




    Submitted on 2006-10-23 12:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I share your pain, as much as the rest of the world does, for there are very few in this world that have not suffered the loss of a loved one.
    They say time heals all wounds, and I believe thats true, but it takes everyone a different amount of time. Keep patience, one day it will come.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
      Really well written, It is amazing how such simple short lines and words can convery so much emotion.
    It actually takes me to the times of my own losses.

    I would like to read this again with a few more lines to it.
    A change I think you could make to this is on the last line forget about matching it with the others, add a little more about this great man.
    I wish to know him from your words, to cause you to write this sweetly about him he must have meant plenty.
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely words Joy, written with much love for your grandad.

    I am sure you will re-visit this and add to it.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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