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Author:	obsidiandreams
ASL Info:	29/M/Canada
Elite Ratio:	3.53 - 169/212/105
Words:	108

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
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Poetry;Words;Ignorance dots

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Words they chase
They race pen ink
Bleeds fourth flow
Thought or emotion;

Drunk off writing
Prefixed commotion
Suffixed devotion;

Sentence structure
Syntax, fatal error
Rigged travesty;

Words ghost written
Ghastly devised in
Midst of grammars ignorance;

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I really like this
To me you are speaking of how words specifically in a write are a way of us releasing the inner tension or inner turmoil that always seems to bring us down
For some of us words are also used to create a new purpose or a new happiness in someone elses life
No matter how you look at it words are a very big part of life if not the biggest
They can change our appearence
Our attitude
And even our way of life
You worded this well
I like how you gave the words from a poets write Human Life
Excellent Job
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at the 2 newest writes I just posted and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
see, why do you do this to me? lol i really do gotta get around to reading && commenting on more of your writes, cause everytime I read one I'm never disappointed. (which is way too rare with a lot of the writers on here.) "drunk off writing" kinda reminds me of what a friend said to me one time......he told me that just about anything and/or anyone can become an intoxication; at the time I was not so sure I believed him but it's ironically more true than anything I ever recall myself having said.
"Words they chase
They race pen ink
Bleeds fourth flow
Thought or emotion;"
that's still probably my favorite part of this write though because sometimes when I"m writing I kind of imagine that, like the pen is racing and the words come on their own accord........and sometime they're gonna end up losing to the pen and I have no clue what will happen when this occurs. bleeding mmmmmm I Like blood a lot, any poem that has "bleeding" "blood" or "bled" has a good chance of me liking it
anyway very......awesome write
| Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.