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    dots Submission Name: Poetry;Words;Ignorancedots

    Author: obsidiandreams
    ASL Info:    29/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 169/212/105
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       my being bored playing with things, tell me what you think

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    Words they chase
    They race pen ink
    Bleeds fourth flow
    Thought or emotion;

    Drunk off writing
    Prefixed commotion
    Suffixed devotion;

    Sentence structure
    Syntax, fatal error
    Rigged travesty;

    Words ghost written
    Ghastly devised in
    Midst of grammars ignorance;

    Submitted on 2006-10-23 13:37:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this
    To me you are speaking of how words specifically in a write are a way of us releasing the inner tension or inner turmoil that always seems to bring us down
    For some of us words are also used to create a new purpose or a new happiness in someone elses life
    No matter how you look at it words are a very big part of life if not the biggest
    They can change our appearence
    Our attitude
    And even our way of life
    You worded this well
    I like how you gave the words from a poets write Human Life
    Excellent Job
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at the 2 newest writes I just posted and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      see, why do you do this to me? lol i really do gotta get around to reading && commenting on more of your writes, cause everytime I read one I'm never disappointed. (which is way too rare with a lot of the writers on here.) "drunk off writing" kinda reminds me of what a friend said to me one time......he told me that just about anything and/or anyone can become an intoxication; at the time I was not so sure I believed him but it's ironically more true than anything I ever recall myself having said.
    "Words they chase
    They race pen ink
    Bleeds fourth flow
    Thought or emotion;"
    that's still probably my favorite part of this write though because sometimes when I"m writing I kind of imagine that, like the pen is racing and the words come on their own accord........and sometime they're gonna end up losing to the pen and I have no clue what will happen when this occurs. bleeding mmmmmm I Like blood a lot, any poem that has "bleeding" "blood" or "bled" has a good chance of me liking it
    anyway very......awesome write
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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