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    dots Submission Name: The Tunneldots
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    Author: Cara R.D
    ASL Info:    16 female Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    0.91 - 57/22/40
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Tunneldots
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    my heart its so cold
    And so scary
    Its dark
    The blood its cut off
    From everything
    It hurts
    And I don't want it
    to my heart It
    can see the fire its burning
    Why is it like this
    I can't seem to understand
    So many things running threw my mind
    Thier starting to build up on me
    I'm falling
    I can't see anymore
    This tunnel
    It's getting darker and darker
    The Tunnel
    That's what I call
    This place
    Where I've locked myself into




    Submitted on 2006-10-23 13:54:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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