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    dots Submission Name: Meaning of Trick-or-Treatdots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Rhyming verse about Halloween


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    dotsMeaning of Trick-or-Treatdots
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    Costumes carried on tiny feet
    Made-up children go trick-or-treat
    In the grayness of an autumn day

    Little girls to witches change
    And boys dress in a ghoulish range
    Going door to door in a begging way

    All Hallows Eve, all seems forgotten
    Nightmarish dreams of crops gone rotten
    Eve of All Saints Day, thatís what they say

    When people in costumes dressed
    Preventing ghosts from souls to possess
    Chaos ruled with practical jokes to play

    Devils and demons in darkness arise
    Spirits so grotesque they blind oneís eyes
    Gloomy thoughts in paling shades of gray

    When the Jack-O-Lantern is lit
    Ghostly ways we try to out wit
    Itís pagan rites that are drawn to pray

    So remember when Trick-or-Treaters are out
    What the scary celebration is all about
    To keep the spirits of the dead at bay

    Happy Halloween




    Submitted on 2006-10-23 13:57:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i also liked how you rhymed every third line, it creates a nice, neat rhythm.
    i think we tend to forget the original reasons for these holidays, they get so hyped up commercially, the real history gets forgotten...such a shame.
    i love seeing the children all dressed up tho', an adults too!
    loved your poem, gets me in the mood for the scares ahead,
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting how you rhymed the third line of every verse.I also like how you refer to the origins of Halloween and remind us of it's original meaning.I thought perhaps you could've structured it a bit better so that it flows a tad smoother,though all in all it's a good piece and certainly topical at this time of the year.Look forward to reading more of your work.
    Cheers
    A.Cowboy.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Asakura Cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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