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    dots Submission Name: Devil in the Detailsdots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1174
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    Bytes: 625



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       Short one...something to think about.


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    dotsDevil in the Detailsdots
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    To abort a fetus or have an offspring of rape, itís the harder-decisions
    that some have to make, a world with no sin is what a martyr envisions
    darker collisions, with the devils wisdom is the peak of why we hate,
    loathing the controlling for judging the mistakes, its enough to worry,
    make people collapse and relapse into guilt like there is a judge and jury
    love with fury, family of strangers engulfed in calamity and anger like brethrens hate
    a faceless father disgraced his daughter, does the blind mother reach heavens gate?





    Submitted on 2006-10-23 15:11:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There alot of hard truths and observations in this. It also seems distant and kinda of sneering towards the end.
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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