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    dots Submission Name: "Summer's Breeze"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots"Summer's Breeze"dots
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    The summer's breeze
    stroked
    the treetops,
    making them sigh,
    and their branches
    tremble,
    and quiver, as if
    begging for more.

    The summer's breeze
    brushed my cheek,
    and
    brought with it the
    imagined
    music
    of your voice,

    the
    bouquet
    of
    our shared
    wine,

    and the lusty
    smell
    of your
    perfume.

    The summer's breeze
    tripped
    across the
    beach,
    teasing the grasses,
    telling tales
    to
    other lovers,

    and
    bringing
    songs
    from
    other lands.

    Ron Cole




    Submitted on 2006-10-23 15:42:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really really like this poem. It really create a very beautiful picture in my head. Summer is always the season for passionate lovers.

    As I read the first two stanza, I see trees, feel wind, and hear music. But then I really like how you put in

    "and the lusty
    smell
    of your
    perfume."

    I can see an image of a really pretty and classy lady, with long hair, sitting under a tree.

    "and
    bringing
    songs
    from
    other lands." is also very beautiful

    I like this a lot :)
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by PrInCeToNgIrL | [ Reply to This ]
      that was very beatuiful..it gave me the chills...vey nice read..good job..keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]
      A wonderful combination of passion and nature. Those breezes making the leaves beg for more were an excellent touch! I like your style with the short lines that encourage the reader to pause and appreciate. Sharon
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Whirl, I adore your compliments, and thank you for your comments! You have a warm personal manner that is wonderful, and it makes me feel like taking the time and effort to write these poems was really worth it after all! Thank you again!
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      now this is what i aim for. i can never write anything and make it sound this romantic. i love the nature aspects, being a nature lover.
    this is brilliant.

    'and the lusty
    smell
    of your
    perfume.'

    that speaks volumes to me. i love that part.it is amazing what we see when we open our eyes!
    you obviously adore this lady. the visions she inspires in you are gorgeous!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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