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    dots Submission Name: **My Name [Oxymoron]dots

    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Hey. I haven't posted anything for a bit, so I decided to post this. I wrote it in English so, enjoy.

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    dots**My Name [Oxymoron]dots

    My name
    is a river
    which flows
    with great ease;
    where rocks
    lay in triumph
    and skip by peacefully.

    My name
    knows no end
    for miles
    down the road;
    swivelling and swerving
    not knowing
    where to turn.

    My name
    but a name
    if called another
    would taste just
    as sweet
    But my name holds
    the truth
    beneath my skin.

    Submitted on 2006-10-23 15:53:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The name we have holds our true essence telling who we really are. Nice piece here and very simple
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      I Like this Caotic
    To me your referring to the water as being the skin to every living breathing creature
    For without water there would be no such thing as life
    I enjoyed this
    I Liked how you gave the beautiful water life and showed how important water is to everything
    Great Job with this
    Look forward to reading more from you soon
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You asked for it so here it comes. Although this poem is rather simple in nature, it seems to lack that fines you might want it to. I find the title oxymoronic, because you are talking about how names may please and names made things become something, but here you are attributing a name to it yourself. I follow the quote of Shakespeare and add some other philosophy to this situation... Even if you change something's name, when you call it out.. it is your intention that this specific thing - whatever it be - comes to you. Therein names are adhering to our intentions... But what allows our mind to be 'logical' is taxonomy, which mind you is classification... Now tell me how else would we classify things, if not by name? Everything in this universe changes physically - except for things like forces, but on a metaphysical plane they "trasnfer" to different forms - and so the only thing that stick through and through are names. This is why we should appreciate them, altough not base our judgments upon them... Because the flaw to a name is that it doesn't allow you to taste the rose's smell, it only permits you to intend it...


    P.S: I think you should use "lay" instead of land... And if your names knows no end, how come it doesn't know where to go next? I also think the But part should be on it's own.. and reworked a little because... it's only half true.. as I've shown you above...
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      haha i know romeo and juliet well, obviously you've read it too. i like how you took something with a kind of original theme, and encorporated speech from hundreds of years ago, it kind of brings the burdons of the past. Im not saying thats what your poem intendid, but that speech, being from the moust famous scene of any Shakespeare play, represents a great challenge. too me, your poem leave some mystery, bc the truth lies beneath your skin.

    much better then the last one i read

    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      Tho it does remind me bitterly of many things in life, a Name just that but a name that riggedly holds out sanity , and vanity by threads and allows us to see and conferm, conform to others, and for others, or for or to ourselves. I think this is a great write and shows much growth from some other pieces, keep them coming.

    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by obsidiandreams | [ Reply to This ]
      "What's in a name? That which we call a rose by another name would smell as sweet." - Romeo and Juliet, Act Two Scene Two.
    The name is eternally echoing through the ends of the world. But are we really nothing without our names?
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, though it would probably make more sense if i knew your name, if it really is about your name, i don't likw the way peacefully is rhymed in there but its ok, anyway good write
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]

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