my two loves by Ryou

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Submission Name: my two loves dots

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Author:	Ryou_Bakura
ASL Info:	16/f/mi
Elite Ratio:	2.96 - 35/43/13
Words:	131

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	123
Average Vote:	3.5000
Bytes:	773

Description:
this is about some one I am inlove with on line. I mean were praticaly dateing, and the other person I know in reality but I don't know if they really like me.

my two loves dots

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My two loves,
Can be compared in ever way,
They both play games,
But one plays with me.
One I see every day,
The other is a key stroke away.
One I can hear, touch, and see,
The other I can only see pictures he sends to me.
One makes me feel like death is on the way,
But I accept comfort anyway,
The other makes me happy,
Just by logging in and saying hi ever day.
One is infatuated with having fun,
The other is infatuated with me.
I love both,
But you can’t hug or kiss thru a cable,
But messing with death,
Isn’t that smart either.
But who to chose,
Both love me.
One I think dose,
But the other I know loves me.

Submitted on 2006-10-23 17:37:44 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  I feel for ya.Don't know what that means exactly but still.I'm in the exact situation right now and i know how it feels.Or i think i do anyway.You wrote about something I never could and for that this is already a stunning piece of work.Also you put it so perfectly that it adds to its beauty.Hope you work it out

kevin
| Posted on 2006-11-28 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]
  you seem confused and don't know who to choose.. but i like it...
lizzie
keep it up
| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]
  Your poem was good nice flow and immediate understanding when you get time check me out at pbabyboo314 give me some advise keep up the good work I know where your coming from not able to choose between two loves. Holla back

P
| Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by pbabyboo314 | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice flow, makes me feel all.. Funny inside lol.. Although, I do care for ya. Hope you feel better, love ya. :)
| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Trevelyan | [ Reply to This ]
  Once again, like the rhythm and flow. Basically, you rock chicky!

Both love me.
One I think dose,
But the other I know loves me.

The only qualm I have is the ending seems a bit contradicting. They both love you yet you think the one does. You either know or don't.

That's all I have to say.

Peace V

Ren
| Posted on 2006-10-23 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
  hey I realy love your writting sryI havent been on latley to comment you more... this poem is one of my fav's keep up th e good work and come to my sight and leave me some comments!!

with all my heart amanda
| Posted on 2006-12-16 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]

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