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    dots Submission Name: That Bookdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThat Bookdots
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    I wish I were that book
    that your glorious eyes greedily feast upon,
    and you could drink me into your brain
    one line at a time as though I were a TV image,
    and you could contemplate
    the things my body has done,
    where my feet have trod,
    sweet lies my lips have told,
    ponder what we could do together.
    We could live out our dreams,
    for surely your own truth
    outshines the fiction of another.




    Submitted on 2004-05-26 15:39:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem a lot--but I have to say, I love some of these comments too, I liked Learah's lol 2 thumbs up---Sharky's? 2 thumbs down?

    This was an interesting thought, to wish to be a book so your love would spend the time to learn about and appreciate, --enjoy you--I liked that because your plea is not so much for the physical attentions, but for communication--sharing stories, learning each other's history, goals, dreams--is so important yet today's couples face so many distractions from intimacy and conversation; Satellite TV's ,internet surfing, all kinds of magazines and journals, even his and hers TV's with separate headphones---so they sit, together in their isolation enjoying sojourns to other worlds--alone. It is sad and you bring that out poignantly. Silver
    | Posted on 2004-06-05 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really great i love how you dipicted yourself as a book, i love how people can do that, like when you know someone really well like the bak of your hand you can read them like a book, i think thast great how people can do that, how we are so in tune with another, great write
    | Posted on 2004-05-28 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I'm back. And you're still writing great little pieces that seem to capture every little nuance and thought of life. You know I wrote a line in a poem about drinking someone, but you use a similar idea to much greater effect. Reading your poems is like looking at one of those 360 degree photos: a feeling captured at a moment in time, yet their scope is 360 degrees. I love the way you write. You’re natural, unforced, a pleasure to read.
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, you certainly opened yourself here. His fault if he doesn't do some reading now. I really like this idea. I sometimes get so engrossed in a book that ... Well, enough said.
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      i wrote something very similar to this about being a book that someone took off the shelf to read and soak up. this was very sensual in an off-beat way. your poems are always intriguing in some special kind of way, dumplin! oh, and what's with that sharky guy? i'd prefer to leave something to the imagination myself.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Sneaking, hesitating, minimalist - your usual style, but it's abit more positive and has less mystery than what I've read of your work so far. There's still that clash between reality and mindscapes though, and I think that's one of the elements that makes your work so peculiar.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      because it's not entirely about the book, I think you should have a better title... i dunno, something about fiction vs reality. SOmething like, Your Own Truth, emphasizing the ending.... which was quite good ~.^ ~Coranna
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love that line 'And you could drink me into your brain'. don't know why but I love it. your images are really good but I don't tell you something new here. but you've portrayed that scream for attention very well although most guys would be probably 'distracted' by the tv or the computer not some book. but I like that you never deliever the common.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of how I have had to battle over the years for my husband not to be jealous when I read a book. He tolerates it with minimal fuss lately, but only because I have confronted him with the fact that I should be allowed at least that much of my own space...but he is constantly vying for my attention and pouting whenever I engross my attention into anything other than him while he is with me...I've always thought it strange, but then in my home when I grew up, everyone read books all the time...he came from a poorly-educated family where books are sneered upon as a waste of time...to this day I don't think he's ever read an entire book cover to cover. He reads magazines, newspapers, reports...he's a very smart man, but not books...he can't visualize things through the written word as well as just sitting, watching TV or a movie, having the images already pre-ordained and parraded in front of his eyes...one of our definite polar opposite traits...
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm very interested in the comparison moving from a book to a tv screen, because if you could break it down, the tv display is made up of lines, not one solid picture. I don't know how many readers would catch that, was it intentional, or merely a reference to where those glorious eyes wander off to instead of you?
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem. I read a lot and this whole idea for the poem was very intriguing! I only wish I'd thought of it first ;)! I like the part about "And you could drink me into your brain One line at a time," It brings great imagery in my mind of watching someone reading a great intently focusing on the book, ignoring everything else. Good job! :)
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      This piece is wonderful. Such beautiful imagery, and such an interesting concept. I to wish I could be poured over, every grain examined, every drip of aqueous ink relished, every slice of the stylus like a cut deep into my heart, now gushing out, flooding onto my pages for only your eyes to see....amazing just amazing, bravo
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by legalinsane | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is amazing comparing love to a book...true love...in the mind...i love this metaphor...great write!! you are really talented...wow im like still in awe
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by summerskiss | [ Reply to This ]
      *Stares goggle-eyed at what Sharky wrote* That fella is mad.

    Ohh, I know how this feels. I've sat there, screaming inside for a bit of attention and received none, because all attention is depleted by the tv or guitar... Meh. The lot of us are too damn good for partners. They should clone us so that we can love ourselves and be loved back just as fiercely!
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      Not the best I have read from you, but even your worst is better than what most of these people can put out, like I said, youve gotta be the best one here. Also, the second line through me off, you may wanna check it.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      You look LOVELY topless!!! ::bursts into giggles at how wrong that sounds:: Hehe, sorry, i couldn't resist. Very fun way to stick it to all those freaks, eh?

    About the POEM: Lovely, i love that first bit, i wish I were that book that your eyes feast upon" oooh, tis very nofty. (Yes, thats a compliment) you did well with this one.

    ::still giggling over picture::

    ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2004-05-29 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      I screwed up the lines, i was PARAPHRASING ALRIGHT? sheesh, its 3:47 am, leave me alone...i mean, not liek i can help the evilness of sleep...well i can but thats not the point.
    | Posted on 2004-05-29 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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