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    dots Submission Name: Waiting To Return To Lovedots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    26 / male / Married
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 68/47/16
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 241
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1351



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       This is to my wife, whom I cant wait till I come home to. I love you my Princess


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    dotsWaiting To Return To Lovedots
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    How I miss your breath on my face and your touch on my skin
    The sound of your voice - so sensual and sweet
    Laughter that rang from your perfect lips
    Your hair, brown as the autumn leaves that fall
    And as long as the winter nights
    Eyes that light up a darkened night
    Your hourglass shape and sense of humor
    Oh why did I have to go so far away, when I had it all at home?
    I left unwillingly to do what I thought was best
    Each day without you is like drinking poison that kills slowly
    Never are you off of my mind, I miss you with every thought
    Every inch of me yearns to hold you again, in my arms, and by my side
    To me you are perfect and that perfection can not be taken away
    From the way you walk all the way to the way you talk
    When your body is embraced by mine, puts me in a place I call heaven
    If such a place as heaven exists, then it exists in you
    I miss you so much, that these words don’t do my feelings justice
    My very soul cries out for you
    Oh how I miss our connection
    I am far from you, but there in spirit
    I am always you willing and loyal subject
    I truly love you with all of my heart
    As for now, I am just waiting to return to love
    Your love

    DeathTone




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      Very lovely with lots of passion good job keep writing your peom was very deep loved it when you get time check me out and give advise at pbabyboo314 Love Needs holla back




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    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by pbabyboo314 | [ Reply to This ]
      It does have passion...I'm not sure what it is, but the flow is very... dis-jointed? The feelings are well conveyed, it has substance, but it seems... well lines 1-10, all versed in metaphor and description then 11-17 are a devout proclamation, any sense of imagery is lost in pleading and from 17 on is very much a shout of affection. All in all as I said, the substance and subject are very passioned and heartfelt, but it was like I had to seperate three poems to read it, but that's just my two cents, it's definitley not bad.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
      A very passionate poem and a delightful read.

    Romantic poetry is a winner, because it is always better to make love than fight wars!

    This poem reaches deep down into the cavity our heart and soul., because you use good metaphors to describe how distance, time and space increases the force of love.

    If we continue asking questions, we can peel all the layers off to discover the truth about love.

    Again, superb writing style. So keep writing with the same passion in all of your poetry writing.

    Keep sharing. Please read more form my poetry collection. Let know what your are thinking. Tell a friend too!


    FireFly747
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by FireFly747 | [ Reply to This ]
      absolutely gorgeous..every word. i'm a sucker for romance.

    If such a place as heaven exists, then it exists in you

    beautiful.
    this is well done!!
    whirl**
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]



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