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    dots Submission Name: Animated Dirtdots
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    Author: UnspokenDreamer
    ASL Info:    21
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 542/753/205
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 229
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    Bytes: 1261



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    dotsAnimated Dirtdots
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    The clock is ticking,
    Everywhere they're starting their cars
    Combustion within, and all around us.
    Something's burning, giving fuel to our possessions;
    Could it be the heat from the flame,
    that soon by many will be attained?
    Already it kindles in our overfilled stomachs,
    and poverty titled mansions.
    We're striving for a better life,
    Yet life,
    does not come from comfort...

    "Truly sir, you must be brief, I have 1 million things to do, and I cannot decline the hasteful pace for which I have set my heart upon."
    Yet all the Lord asks of us,
    "Don't be afraid; Just believe."


    So as the rains come, and not from our clouds above,
    The storms that rise up all around us,
    from the ones we hold closest to our hearts;
    When these times come
    and the torrent winds are dividing the ground
    we spent our life’s work to stand on...
    The mud will form and you might realize,
    The man they call, "Christ",
    His words held much worth.
    He came to show us how to be,
    More than Animated Dirt.




    Submitted on 2006-10-24 09:26:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, a little inspiration goes a long way here!! I love this, you have brought genesis to modern day. Amazing :) Although I'm not surprised at all, because I always knew you had it in you.

    No wonder you are so incredibly talented. The Lord blessed you with a gift to help others to see the world in modern day, through Christs eyes, and you do it almost flawlessly.

    In awe :)

    Sorrel

    P.S...I'm taking this with me.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the title and how it ties into the poem. I can't really explain why, but I love it. I usually don't like religious poems, though I'm very religious myself; but I like this one. The only problem that jumped out at me was in the third line. "As well as all around us" just sounds/feels weird. Overall, I think it's great.
    -Faye
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]



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