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    dots Submission Name: Introspectdots

    Author: cdigou
    Elite Ratio:    0.52 - 0/1/1
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    The twisted workings of the mind
    As it grapples for keys to secret doors
    That lead to knowledge sensed
    From places and times unseen.
    Scrambled attempts to untangle
    The web of experience from the confines
    Of the inadequate consciousness.

    In dreams, in secret thoughts and musings
    It taps lightly on the window of awareness,
    Waiting for the veil to lift,
    Probing for some hint of enlightenment,
    Some encouragement that eyes can see.
    Nagging, hovering, whispering, pausing,
    Provoking the sleeping shadows.

    Each knot untangled brings forth
    A new stream of light, a new realization.
    Each moment of clarity illuminates a path
    That leads to expansion.
    Each dot connected, each puzzle solved,
    Each knowing that comes unquestioned
    Polishes rust from the key that unlocks
    The door to the hidden mirror.

    2006 Carol Digou

    Submitted on 2006-10-24 11:13:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      great word choice. i love the feel of rich words over the tounge, the whole thing really flows like the tangled mess you describe. though it almost seems as though you trying to put too many ideas into one peice. let them breathe.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]

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