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Author: anooplokur
ASL Info:    21/male/india
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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a puzzles hidden in the poem...wrote it for some1 speacial....i guess u must have figured it out by now lol


Mariam, Mariam, Mariam
Aloud in my head your name resonates,
Reflections of you, your sweetness, your innocence
In a desert like a mirage,
A picture of you in my eyes.
Myriad stars on a sweet midsummer night.

Mariam, Mariam, Mariam
Under the same sun, stars and the moon;
Here I am away from you
Avowing my emotions to thee,
Miles and miles apart
Mystical signs of love guiding you and I;
Endless nights we shall languish with a smile, For
Destiny shall bring us together,

Mariam, Mariam, Mariam
Ask the stars embedded on the blue skies, shining for you;
Susurrant words of love flowing like
Rivers! Glistening rivers streaming into the infinite oceans;
In this poem, your name lives.

Submitted on 2006-10-24 12:27:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]
  I lik-um. reminds me of what I used to say to my girlfriend as many miles separated us.
I would say:
look deep into the eyes of our emotions
while the space between us
still hears the beat and thrill of our love.
| Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
  "In a desert like a mirage,
A picture of you in my eyes.
Myriad stars on a sweet midsummer night."

- what beautiful and sweet lines. especially, the mirage and desert, myriad stars. yes this truly the describes the beauty of a desert. how lovely

"Susurrant words of love flowing like
Rivers! Glistening rivers streaming into the infinite oceans;"

- what a lucky person, ur words really do flow like rivers, leading to the ocean of your emotion which is endless.

i love the passion and beauty of this poem.
| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by LovelyGoddess | [ Reply to This ]
  Very good, original and passionate. Whoch is very rare, it truly gives an aura of love and an image of beauty, not to long, not to short, wuite good, wuite good indeed!
| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Nihilist Weasel | [ Reply to This ]
  mariam muhammed masri. and love this poem they will. delicious.
the perfect poem for the one you love.
| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
  this is nice, i like it, its kinda sad and good, not a thing that i can think of that i would change or correct, is pretty good grammar and spelling wise as far as i can see pretty good
Thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
  Perfect in every aspect...You and the poem … most beautiful poem I’ve ever read …you know how I feel about it ..each time I read it I become speechless for I have never been so lucky as I am now.

| Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
  the others who commented on this poem have already said most of what i wanted to say. either way, i think the peom was quite thought out, and words were chosen for a reason. I think that it has to be read with a certain level of understanding. however it is a very lovley poem. I did enjoy reading it. thank you. SHOUT page works
| Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]

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