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    dots Submission Name: Catching Tearsdots
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    Author: Never Known
    Elite Ratio:    6.86 - 21/13/9
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       someone my husband knows commited suicide yesterday...

    I posted something yesterday that portrayed hope and faith, and it completely blows my mind of what I'm writing about today..


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    Oh, beautiful child lost
    in a world that you thought ugly,
    you'll cry no more tears tonight.
    The time has come
    for everyone else to weep for you,
    though you couldn't imagine they would.

    Oh, beautiful child silenced
    by the hand of your own anguish,
    you'll feel no more pain tonight.
    It is now the ones who loved you most
    who carry all your burden,
    as they try to fathom what it was.

    Oh, beautiful child gone...
    why did you paint your world so ugly?




    Submitted on 2006-10-24 13:17:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know what it is about this piece that rings a seldom heard sound... It's not about being more than something, because it is on it's own something that's already too much... I sometimes wonder why people cry about things like this, because it's been present in my life - time to time - and well... I've never mustered out a tear... I guess it's just what they mean to me... And times like these are meant to remind you and make you think, of course there is that pain; it's something that we'd rather not deal with but need all at once... You know ?

    Ah well.... I guess it's just because this happenstance is much more obvious in my life that I enjoyed, or at least understood I should say, this piece.

    Outlaw-ed

    P.S: This is what you need... ...
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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