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    dots Submission Name: My Angel With Broken Wingsdots

    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I'm not quite sure where all this is coming from. Alot of my writings, recently, have told of demons and suffering. Perhaps the inner battle isn't as well hidden as I would like it to be. Oh well, what I write is me, and I suppose this is the way I feel. No happy thoughts from me! Ack. Oh well, Enjoy (if possible).

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    dotsMy Angel With Broken Wingsdots

    Abandoned, rejected,
    Left here to die.
    My angel sits aside,
    And silently cries.

    No miracle so grand,
    Can save me from this fate.
    The depth of my loss so deep,
    Grieving converts into pure hate.

    Rage takes over whats left,
    Of my ragged weary soul.
    Soon the demons inside,
    Take full and total control.

    Trapped and forever lost,
    Swallowed up by hate,
    Wondering if I can survive,
    I feel I'll never escape.

    My angel, with broken wings,
    Sheds a final heartfelt tear,
    She mourns along with me,
    I am doomed to die here.

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      I really like this, I kinda wanna sit here and say "chin up" but that sounds so trite.
    There is nothing I would change, truly nothing. I have recently found that I have happiness within, I don't think I have ever been as happy as I am now, and I don't know whether to put it down to my new flat, my recently giving up drinking alcohol - I was kind of an alcoholic for about 7 or 8 years, or whether it is just that I have found a wonderful friend that I can vent my frustration on. Who knows. At the end of the day though, life can only be what we make of it.

    My angel, with broken wings,
    Sheds a final heartfelt tear,
    She mourns along with me,
    I am doomed to die here.

    My favourite verse, it gives such vision and I can see your angel with broken wings crying in my minds eye.

    Keep smiling, and hell, please keep writing!!!
    God bless
    Frann. x
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Effee | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great I loved how touching it was! It made me feel for you and send out a tear. If not for bad luck some of us would have no luck at all, right? Well keep your head up and I hope everything is alright?
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Once again you write so wonderfully! I liked your rhyming scheme and how you kept it about the subject title and did not break off onto the tangent of where the pain stems.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      You have much promise, but always remember there will always be more to learn. The more you think you know the less you know. Keep at it, I believe you become an even better writer in the future.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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