Now I'm on a computer that allows me to comment, so I'll comment on this now after I added it to my favorites:
This poem is a great image of the rollercoaster love of teenagers. There is passion, trust and happiness vowen into a relationship with anxiety, uncertainty and the need to be recognized.
Catch me - because I am falling out of the "safe love" Throw me higher - Because I want to experience it again
I wanted to pull you so deep into my life, and I told you so many times that I was afraid. I showed weakness, but only because I knew it. You told me to not be afraid, and one by one I stopped my fears. I wanted to touch you in ways I don't think any woman is touched in these shallow days. I wanted to share all of my secrets, but I didn't know how.
I thought if I just felt safer I could do it. And i wrapped you around my heart, so tight, even though I saw you thinking of leaving, I saw you never tell your sisters on the phone that I exist, I wrapped you around my heart anyway and trusted you to choose your path and support it.
And I did, or tried my best. Even the whisper of you choosing the other way I put my full effort in trying to put you away.
But I wrapped you so tight around my heart, and when you left, I felt so sick in my chest. Its not breaking you feel in your heart, it is emptiness, like having starved for days on end, but not in your stomach, right in your heart. Like you can't breathe... thats why the heart is associated with love. It beats faster when it is there, and feels empty when it leaves.
I was your biggest fan, even though I don't know what of those things you said were real or not, which of those secrets you hid and which you invented. I don't care, I never did, the only truth I ever wanted was that I made you feel good, and that you loved me even a little as much as I did you.
On the contrary, this is a great piece! The title was original (which is why I read it) and I didn't leave disappointed, because the writing was beautifully original as well!
Catch me Throw me higher Tell me something Only you tell the skies
These are absolutely brilliant lines and sound like there's a lot behind them, longing, love, pain, sorrow, excellent. I can tell why this is a feature work. Great write and its going in my favs! Well done!!!!
When I read this poem I didn't feel any emotion to it. The words were there and they fit together good but I don't feel emotion or passion in this. Good try though.
Submission Name: Catch me, throw me higher
