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    dots Submission Name: Catch me, throw me higherdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1635
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       i wrote this thinking about impromptu..so no previous thought was put into it..this is basically a freewrite..hope ya like it!!!!!


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    Catch me
    throw me higher
    tell me something
    you only tell the skies

    lost in the innocence
    time transudes through us
    i give you what your heart desire

    Feel the fire
    Burning fervor
    Clouds and raindrops sooth you
    Love me
    pull me closer
    touch me somewhere
    ive never been touched before

    Lose me
    in your loving eyes
    fallin in your broken soul
    faster than a falling star
    Wrap me tight in your embrace

    Make me feel like i am priceless
    Yet worth a million dollars
    The world beneath my tip toes
    Walkin on gods hands

    You make me feel
    Like a breath in the cool winds
    Ever so calm
    ever so deep

    Youre mysterious
    and i am now falling

    Catch me
    throw me higher
    tell me something
    you only tell the skies

    Love me
    pull me closer
    touch me somewhere
    ive never been touched before

    You dont know
    but i am your biggest fan

    You cant see me
    But i see you when you dance

    I now know the things
    you hid away for so long




    Submitted on 2004-05-26 17:37:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now I'm on a computer that allows me to comment, so I'll comment on this now after I added it to my favorites:

    This poem is a great image of the rollercoaster love of teenagers. There is passion, trust and happiness vowen into a relationship with anxiety, uncertainty and the need to be recognized.

    Catch me - because I am falling out of the "safe love"
    Throw me higher - Because I want to experience it again
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Cindergarden1 | [ Reply to This ]
      I wanted to pull you so deep into my life, and I told you so many times that I was afraid. I showed weakness, but only because I knew it. You told me to not be afraid, and one by one I stopped my fears. I wanted to touch you in ways I don't think any woman is touched in these shallow days. I wanted to share all of my secrets, but I didn't know how.

    I thought if I just felt safer I could do it. And i wrapped you around my heart, so tight, even though I saw you thinking of leaving, I saw you never tell your sisters on the phone that I exist, I wrapped you around my heart anyway and trusted you to choose your path and support it.

    And I did, or tried my best. Even the whisper of you choosing the other way I put my full effort in trying to put you away.

    But I wrapped you so tight around my heart, and when you left, I felt so sick in my chest. Its not breaking you feel in your heart, it is emptiness, like having starved for days on end, but not in your stomach, right in your heart. Like you can't breathe... thats why the heart is associated with love. It beats faster when it is there, and feels empty when it leaves.

    I was your biggest fan, even though I don't know what of those things you said were real or not, which of those secrets you hid and which you invented. I don't care, I never did, the only truth I ever wanted was that I made you feel good, and that you loved me even a little as much as I did you.
    | Posted on 2004-06-23 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]
      On the contrary, this is a great piece! The title was original (which is why I read it) and I didn't leave disappointed, because the writing was beautifully original as well!

    Catch me
    Throw me higher
    Tell me something
    Only you tell the skies

    These are absolutely brilliant lines and sound like there's a lot behind them, longing, love, pain, sorrow, excellent. I can tell why this is a feature work. Great write and its going in my favs!
    Well done!!!!
    | Posted on 2004-05-27 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      When I read this poem I didn't feel any emotion to it. The words were there and they fit together good but I don't feel emotion or passion in this. Good try though.
    | Posted on 2004-05-26 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]


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