Saying Goodbye

Author: LocketzVC ASL Info:    18/F/pa Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 12 /42 /18 Words: 55

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Saying Goodbye

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Say goodbye is not something we all wish to do It's a fact of life Saying goodbye is not something well liked But it's sometimes much needed Saying goodbye sometimes means so much Like saying "I'll see you soon!" or "I miss you already" What does my saying goodbye mean to you?

Submitted on 2006-10-24 19:57:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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However well expressed, this "Goodbye" poem is merely a string of prose sentences laid out to look like a poem. Surely such a meaningful idea needs more to touch us. Sorry, but this is how I feel about this particular piece of work and, in any case, I don't think it goes deep enough. Donald

| Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]

Hmmm.....my thoughts? I think it was good, and I understand that it is hard to say goodbye. I've had to do it many times in my life, and I'll probably have to do it many more. I think that maybe, you could add more to this though. Like Cayman said, describe more instead of being so mysterious about it. But I do like it the way it is right now. Good Job. ~Piper

| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]

Would have been nice to be more descriptive about this event. Just dig deep and throw it on the paper. What where your thoughts? What did you think he was thinking? Were you happy, crying?

| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Cayman | [ Reply to This ]

This poem is by no means brilliant, but I like the idea that you left if open so the reader can finish and relate it to a loss of there own. Keep writing people will read it.

| Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]

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