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    dots Submission Name: O Hollow's Eve(Samain)dots
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    Author: obsidiandreams
    ASL Info:    29/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 169/212/105
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsO Hollow's Eve(Samain)dots
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    Hollow is the sudden voice
    Sacred tourniquet to Samain
    Reminiscing upon black magic

    Ghastly hordes do write
    The scripture of a thousand tongues
    While demons fire burns the pages,

    Take them down, one by one,

    O hollows eve the day of saints
    and past life unto ash's


    Bring me fathom, faith to fear
    In a rosewood, ashen casket




    Submitted on 2006-10-25 14:11:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      its pretty good...not quite sure what you meant by "well demons". might have been a typo, might just be going over my head. teehee. anyway, if this is unfinished, ill be it will be killer when its done...

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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