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    dots Submission Name: Foreign words, foreign feelings.dots

    Author: numbertwenty
    ASL Info:    16 Female
    Elite Ratio:    1.41 - 55/25/9
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 967
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 596

       Sometimes those three little words can ruin everything.

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    dotsForeign words, foreign feelings.dots

    Late night dreams
    Wishing they were real
    Frustrating screams
    Pain. It's what I feel.

    One two three
    They travel through space
    I love you
    The words I can't erase.

    The words I can't find.
    The words that have no meaning.
    The words that are defined.
    The words I keep screaming.

    Foreign feelings
    I can't handle
    My mind is reeling
    Light the candle.

    Hypnotic heartbeats
    Poetic words
    Weaken me down
    I don't deserve.

    Submitted on 2006-10-25 16:16:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Lovely poem, Kaitlyn!
    | Posted on 2007-02-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      it's nice. i can tell it's about love. definetly. good work.

    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by rocker5871 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this piece and i agree...those three little words are really powerfull, but these days people throw them around like they are meaningless. what they dont realize is that when they tell someone that they love them...even if it doesnt show, that person is holding onto those words and thinking about them everyday. ive been there, i know. keep posting more stuff like this and i will keep reading.

    | Posted on 2006-11-15 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]
      I cant help but agree with the others on this one. your portaril of love hits hard and true. just as those three tiny words remain in a persons head forever.
    Great job. i loved it.
    The Black Fairy
    | Posted on 2006-11-09 00:00:00 | by TheBlackFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i have to agree with the others..good work..very nice read..as soon as you get more i will continue to read..
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]
      well done good lady!...................you have a very soft and playful style.......i really like that very much...............tone it and you will make it something great good job!.......the roped one
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ropedpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah that's pretty much all that love is. Everything that you can imagine. I mean it can be said with meaning or deptively and we can never tell what it is. But we have no choice but to go along with it.
    | Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by Katana Ryoko | [ Reply to This ]

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