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    dots Submission Name: Shaved Apesdots
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    Author: Twice
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 71/82/52
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsShaved Apesdots
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    I pound my fist on this
    Loaded life
    A child of evolution
    ignorance runs free like wild horses
    on the plains of Me
    Shaved apes
    eat peeled grapes
    in stucco castles
    hassled by hunger
    free of need
    75 cents feeds a family 4
    Like quarentined Angels
    Our desease won't spread
    Blood red
    Like our forefathers dead
    we will all
    Answer for this sin.




    Submitted on 2006-10-25 17:59:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is deep
    I believe you are referring to what I respectivelly believe to be a false belief that man origanated from the Apes
    A lot of people have this belief so who am I to judge my belief better then others but Honestly I will let the facts speak for themselves
    You worded this well
    No matter which one of us our correct in our beliefs I do believe there will come a time when man becomes tired of living in Poverty when others are unfairly living the Life of Luxory
    I hope this War will not happen in our lifetime bur sadly it looks like it just might
    God Bless
    Excellent work
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Theres only truth in facts, not beliefs.

    Looks like a typo or two, no big deal.

    "ignorance runs free like horses
    on the plains of Me" I like the way some of this was worded, like the previous instance. This really has a touchy subject, and was approached with a biased feeling, and emotion. to which you did a good job at expressing.
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]


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