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    dots Submission Name: Fleeting Happinessdots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFleeting Happinessdots
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    Her face will fade away.
    Her touch will follow with another day.
    Forgetting a hill sloping with a strange degree.
    Losing sight of things about her I thought to be beauty.
    Her rose petals gone remembering only thorns.
    I swallow despair and dine on times forlorn.
    I misplaced scenes of us laying on the lawn.
    Watching as the night gave way to the dawn.
    Fading away is her smile as I stare up at the moon.
    Eventually, everything about her will be gone soon.




    Submitted on 2004-01-28 15:10:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice , elegantly sums up how memories fade when love is gone. ..I like "that" line also, it's a good image.
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that line too. Nice.
    | Posted on 2004-01-28 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]


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