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    dots Submission Name: Tearstained goodnightdots
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    Author: wildriver
    ASL Info:    18/Female/kearney, NE
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 13/12/12
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 558
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    Description:
       for the fear of losing someone forever


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    dotsTearstained goodnightdots
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    Morning follows the darkness
    as it always will;
    I look at your face,
    but I see nothing still.
    It is a shadow
    that blocks your life;
    I think you can hear me
    but I don't know why.
    What do they know
    those who say you are gone?
    they don't know us
    that our spirit lives on.
    i can still see you breathing
    I can still feel your heart
    Lord, don't make this the day
    that we forever part.
    Night falls again
    and your breath becomes shy;
    it is apparently now
    that we share a final goodbye.
    A fire lives on
    as you go away;
    I'll dance with you again
    and be your love once more some day




    Submitted on 2006-10-25 19:43:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that really sucks... not your work... what you are talking about/
    | Posted on 2006-10-25 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]


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