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    dots Submission Name: Internally Dieingdots
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    Author: TeenaSuicide
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    0.54 - 12/12/11
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 897
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1118



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       i wrote this with my gf


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    dotsInternally Dieingdots
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    today i hurt myself
    to see if i can feel
    lately ive felt so numb
    that only pain is real
    i can feel nothing els
    but the pain inside
    i can see myself declining
    down this emotional slide
    i can sence the darkness
    closeing in on me
    i can heare the condesending
    thoughts of who i should be
    thoughts of who i could never be
    frequently thrown in my face
    now all i have to comfort me is
    the pain of a blade
    the blood relieves my anger as
    i fall to the bottom of this bottomless
    pit of dispare
    im a loner eith scars eternaly afraid
    to lead my own way
    just think of me as the girl
    with gashes for glitter
    afraide to be herself
    so she acts selfish and bitter
    she hates who she is
    and she hates who shes been
    she tries her hardest just to be a good friend
    and when she is regected her blade is her only asylum
    she hides in the shadows
    and lets her blood do the crying
    mad at the world shes internaly dieing




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