Thoughts of Sadness by DeathTone

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Author:	DeathTone
ASL Info:	24 / male / Married
Elite Ratio:	5.69 - 68/45/15
Words:	205

Class/Type:	Rant/Depressed
Total Views:	168
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	980

Description:
this is completly raw, and it took me 10 min to write it. it was just what was in my head and how i was feeling so if it doesnt make sense then im sorry. thats how it came out. please comment

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I wish I could cry and let it all out, but for some reason the tears just won’t flow
I’m hurting inside and I’m full of sorrow, every time I look into a mirror I feel like screaming because I dislike what I see. I see an ugly person, who has no love in him, no self worth, No life to speak of. No matter what I do, no one gives a shit about me. When they start to care, I push them away. Someone as ugly as me shouldn’t have friends. What have I done to hurt like this? My mind is full of confusing thoughts, and I can’t put them in order. I contradict my self constantly, and I don’t know why. Yet I want to cry and wallow in my own sadness, which I have created for my self. Inside I’m crying and outside I’m dying. You see me laughing & joking, and in your mind you think I’m fine. But inside you have no idea the battle that I fight in my head. My soul cries to be released, and the sadness begins to win. So I kill my self and commit the ultimate sin.

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  ....this is pretty long, compared to the other degrading poems, people have written.
Life is such a "stinker" ay?
but depression just does the finest at making people hating themself, and thinking their ugly...making them...basically do the actions in this peom. especially the suicide thought...Suicide is such a big factor, in alot of peoples writes...how suicide is the ultimate medicine...and just ends all the bullsH*t, but really doesn't...i don't know wherez after suicide...but i'm pretty sure here is better.
even if it's rough around the edges.
this is not a comment, trying to convince you to not do it....but advice...maybe try to enjoy life, don't brood all the time...it's a waste of time..to have hate for everything, and pushing people away who try to help.
...i've comment on the basis of the poem...I'm sure the 10 minutes..was much more than this, sorrow and confused thoughts, seem to bring out the best of writing..and it does make sense..it's very simple, the meaning.
so no worries.
take care.
| Posted on 2006-12-02 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, no yes it does make sense. Alot. Thats how I feel quite often, just mostly so confused and misunderstood. Constantly pushing people away for the worst and wrong of reasons. You did a great job writing those feeling down and laying them out. Perfect pretty much. I absolutely love this peice.
| Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
  the battle of demons most people can't remember. it's a war we all fight some lose and others win most don't even relise it. keep up the good wrighting
Drow
| Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by drow | [ Reply to This ]
  first off this is good i love it how it is tons of emotion and feeling,two u have self worth i can feel it when i read what u write,and third this exactly as i feel.anyway ttyl.
~safire~
| Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  thats sad, you have selfworth or you couldn't write, i hope this isn't how you really feel its a good little write and i don't think that you should change it because its good as is . any way good write
~~Vynom
| Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
  but why are you pushing ppl away? none of us wants to be hurt, but it's a fact of life. sounds to me like you could do with a friend to talk to. so you need to try and accept this.
i like how raw this is, it hasn't been messed with. it is a pouring of emotion. straight from the heart.
it made me feel sad though, i don't like that you feel you need to smile on the outside, while inside you feel like dying. no one should feel this way, it's upsetting that we always feel alone, when in reality, we are far from it.
i do hope you get over this self hate thing, learn to appreciate yourself.....easier said than done, but please try.
great write, full of feeling.
whirl**
| Posted on 2006-10-26 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]

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