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    dots Submission Name: The reasons you borther me.dots

    Author: Adden Lee
    ASL Info:    19/Female/Changing Always
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 39/35/17
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1189
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 480

       the pic i thought worked with the lines "I hit you,/ And you kissed me."

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    dotsThe reasons you borther me.dots

    I wanted to jump,
    But you held me back.
    I wanted to hide,
    But you found me.
    I wanted to stay in the darkness,
    But you shine your light over me.

    I smacked you,
    And you held me.
    I hit you,
    And you kissed me.
    I pulled away from you,
    And you comforted me.

    Those are the reasons you bother me,
    And though I havenít said it out loud,
    Those are the same reasons I love you.

    Submitted on 2006-10-26 23:09:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is good poetry I like the way it was flowed, ty
    | Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that you portrayed the ideal mate perfectly. One that will always be there no matter what you are going through, no matter what happens, even if you cause them pain. I love it. Great Job.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by numbertwenty | [ Reply to This ]
      babes, this is wicked, it reminds me, slightly of my poem.. that isnt on here, cos i dont think its good enough to go public, might tweek it an eventually put it up, this is really nice and its true as well, thats what me and my ex were like, though.. there was a little leass violence
    | Posted on 2006-11-04 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it!!!!!!!!!!!! it really reminds me of a night i got drunk and fought with my boyfriend. right down to the exact point, except it didn't bother me and the night I told him i loved him. I love this, i'm definetly adding it to my favs. nice work hope to read more.
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by hellsangel | [ Reply to This ]
      Really nice piece there. You have a nice writing style for someone your age. "We hurt those we love more than we hurt others around us". Your piece made me think of this quote and gave me an idea for another poem to write. Thanks for the inspiration
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]

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