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    dots Submission Name: Youdots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1006
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1263



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       About a girl that don't appreciate me. dont worry about the name you'll never know her shell never know you.


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    dotsYoudots
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    I believed youre words,I swallowed you're lie
    I was there every second ,You tried not to cry
    Why couldn't you look ,Why couldn't you see
    Why the fuck did you have to forget about me
    I was always there,To show you the truth
    If you were upset ,I was helping you through
    I gave you everything ,You took it all
    I didnt even get ,One fucking phone call
    Go cry over him,You'll never see
    You'll always be blinded ,By youre selfish greed
    You could have just told me, Right from the start
    That I'm not fucking good enough,For you're precious heart
    Don't tell me you love me,Don't tell me you care
    Don't say you'll be there for me,Don't you fucking dare
    I'll laugh at youre feuneral and spit on youre grave
    For the fake love and hope that you whispered and gave
    The only way you'll notice me and treat me with respect
    Is when I'm in the newspaper under recent deaths
    I don't need a gun, I dont need a blade
    I don't need to jump and I don't need to hang
    Why kill myself,I have no need to
    The only thing killing me, slowly is you.




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      Oh wow. My body temperature was actually rising as I was reading this. Amazing feeling coming from this piece. You did a wonderful job expressing your anger here. Many people have difficulties writing while angry, they'd rather shred the notepad, or obliterate the keyboard lol. Keep up the good work.

    ~Kiki
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      as far as your writing goes... i would change the title, YOU is way too popular... maybe something like YOU'RE F*CKING KILLING ME, or something.
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      f*ck that cock smoking whore... Kill that B*TCH
    !!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This was really good, I'm not just saying that either. I really think you have the poetential to be a great writer. The rhyme is absolutely perfect and sets a consistent rhythm. The poem seems to be pulsing with emotion and the point is perfectly clear. Excellent.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      hello another canadian your post was good it seems in life we all have to meet someone who totallly f..ks with our head at least once in life
    chalk it up to expierence

    great send off

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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