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    dots Submission Name: finedots

    Author: janitor
    ASL Info:    21/Male/Alabama
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       everything isn't what it seems

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    what's fine?

    On a scale from one to ten it's a dime
    if looks could kill, it committed the crime
    the wavy thighs, commanding attention,
    along with hips are the lemon and lime
    that cause ascension to new dimension
    having all the would-be's standing in line
    That's Fine.
    The definition of sublime.

    What a shame some feel they have to deny
    its beauty; before it bids us goodbye
    men find a different trait to mention
    vying for its favor, giving a try
    and with a suspended comprehension
    one-by-one it offers them a decline
    That's Fine.
    Never was the type to be shy.

    one-by-one, men come to senses and find
    real beauty, in which distortion was lined
    formed as pomposity and pretension
    seeing the future and paying no mind
    its dissension becoming convention
    one-by-one men will dismantle the shrine
    That's Fine.
    Another grape will grow on the vine.

    Submitted on 2006-10-27 04:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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