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    dots Submission Name: Big Mazedots
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    Author: rawpot
    ASL Info:    24/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.83 - 383/256/84
    Words: 190
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 748
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       Life, oh dear!!!


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    dotsBig Mazedots
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    Big Maze!

    Silly me, wondering where to go,
    Finding paths that only show no end,
    Start walking thing its leading some place,
    Bump, there I go, in to a dead end.

    Start again, think again, think…
    Where am I?
    What am I doing?
    Oh yes, I remember this is just a muse,
    I am living,

    What is life?
    A big no way out maze
    Hazy days and sleepy nights
    Blue skies, stormy nights,

    Silly me,
    Caught up in a Maze,
    Always trying a place to rest,
    Trying to find a path,
    Leading a way out,

    Funny, the way out has been easy,
    And always been the same,
    Get killed,
    Die of old age peacefully in sleep,
    Sickness, aids, cancer and whatever you can think off…

    Wonder I am even wondering where I am going with my life,
    Biz maze is as big as it can get,
    Crazy and misleading as it can,
    Why do I bother so much,

    I guess I’ll stay put and find comfort,
    Whatever, where ever I find myself,
    Live life!!,
    As long as I can!
    In the big maze…




    Submitted on 2006-10-27 05:11:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yes, you have caught LIFE in the big Maze. It is just as well we can't see over the hedges to our future or the world's future. This initially felt like a little despair but I think that you finally come out of your maze - or part of it - with a triumphant cry of "let's do it".
    A most fascinating read.
    I think the uneveness at the beginning could be moderated and, in any case, my own feeling is that you could, perhaps, have been better satrting at "What is life"? You could still bring in the ideas from V1/2 etc but, in any case, you are the poet and know best how you wanted it to impact.
    Thank you for the read.
    Donald
    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by siradrian | [ Reply to This ]


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