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    dots Submission Name: Apocalyptic Preludiumdots
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    Author: Wolfie
    ASL Info:    18/Male/sweden
    Elite Ratio:    4.97 - 66/61/37
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsApocalyptic Preludiumdots
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    Softly
    Stirring motions and crackling embers
    Entities of an incipient Holocaust
    Delicate silver strings
    Slicing though air, flesh, stone
    Shining platinum wings
    Unravelling winters peak all alone

    Calmly
    Icy winds and newborn flame
    Merging of prominent death
    Powerful drums of gold
    Waking dead roses into bloom
    And whispers of a story untold
    To end its fate of dawning doom

    Rising
    Brass horns and diamond harps
    Calling instruments of a coming clash
    Silent crystal bluebells
    Ringing in the soldiers to fight
    And flutes played by dying angels
    Will lead them into endless night




    Submitted on 2006-10-27 07:20:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this, even the title. Sometimes when writers try to drag readers in they use large words for their title and it just doesn't go with their poem, but that's not the case here at all. The title did attract me to the poem, which is good, but it also went with it...almost like a two worded summary.
    I do have a favorite line in this, it's...

    "Entities of an incipient Holocaust"

    I'm not sure why, it just sounds good to my ears...well...my mind actually.
    I also liked this one part in your last stanza....

    "Silent crystal bluebells
    Ringing in the soldiers to fight"

    I really liked the symbolism in this. Since the soldiers are rung in to fight by silent ringing bluebells, I think it means that they are fighting for nothing at all, because there is nothing ringing inthe first place.
    Dispite it's shortness, you put alot into this. It kinda reminds that a poem doesn't have to be long to be complex. Nice write, I'll be back for more. Later...

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagry in this is utterly amazing. I have never read anything so descriptive by one of my peers in my life. I swear that is utterly brilliant and beautiful. The only problem I could find was that in stanza one line five "though" should be through. Thank you for such a thought provoking and captivating read. I will have to read some more of your writing and hope that someday I can write halfway as beautiful as this.
    Briannan.
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by Briannan | [ Reply to This ]


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