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    dots Submission Name: YELL SHOUT HOWL SCREAM CRYdots

    Author: nomad knight
    Elite Ratio:    6.66 - 110/75/41
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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       This is the most anxiety baised poem that i've written in a long time. I wrote this all up in one spurt and now i feel a bit better.

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    I YELL at those I once called close friends
    The back draft of my suppressed anger
    Breaks free in a blast from my mindís frayed ends
    Hurling them away so Iím free of their danger

    I SHOUT out my undying defiance to my foes
    Letting them all know that Iím still here
    That my will is unbroken despite their blows
    And that I wonít bow down to them in fear

    I HOWL like a wolf does to the moon at night
    Because of memories, splintered with time,
    That stick into the skin of my mind and bite
    Viciously like teeth for an uncommitted crime

    I SCREAM out in raging pain to the world
    So that everyone hears my caged demons being fed
    What that boy feels, as a ball in the corner curled
    The screeching noise of that electric drill penetrating my head

    I CRY bitterly, with all my agony, a loud harsh note
    But a reaction from the faces around me canít be found
    For though blood should drip from my ears and inside my throat
    From my lips you will hear not a sound

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      I love how blunt this piece is
    Everything you are feeling is total raw human emotion and you exposed anger thouroughly.
    my favorite stanza was :

    I HOWL like a wolf does to the moon at night
    Because of memories, splintered with time,
    That stick into the skin of my mind and bite
    Viciously like teeth for an uncommitted crime

    This specifically was awesome imagery, overall I love the tone of the whole piece :)
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
    Okay I definetly felt that. To write it in a spurt its so strong and gosh I think i heard you scream ! That says it all.
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by Wolfdawn | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked that. its good to let things out. and everyone has those dayys.

    | Posted on 2006-10-30 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      i did like how vivid you were with this, and i feel you did a good job on the ryming. the blood part is what got me though, i loved that part. this person seemed to me to be angry and confused to all hell. dare i say even scared of them selfs and what is trying to get in. i could be off or wrong but this person seems to be introuble.

    Let me know if im right or wrong please
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by DeathTone | [ Reply to This ]

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