Ineffable Tale -------------------------------------------
Submurged sanctions allure inflamed ambiance
derogotive truths, troops- for the noir manicans
despotic tyranny!- orthodox cessation submitted
sentiments immure!- released to come with it
portentous!- never I dare speak that tounge
ability to function; Maimed! endure for that weak to come
accede! you must comply I necessitate only this
describe the ineffable we share, hold me miss...
From the looks of the title you attempted to do the contrary. I enjoyed reading it. It seemed to be about a relationship in which the girl was over bearing and controlling, im sure it could be about a lot of things though. NIce work
So it seems throughout this whole poem that you were trying to go over the top with the abstraction until the end where you kind of loosened up a bit and there is more coherence and flow while keeping the theme of the previous part of the poem. Either you got lazy towards the end, or you finally caught your brilliance.
Submission Name: Ineffable Tale
