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    dots Submission Name: Ineffable Taledots

    Author: Pprophet
    ASL Info:    19/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.85 - 91/12/9
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsIneffable Taledots

    Submurged sanctions allure inflamed ambiance
    derogotive truths, troops- for the noir manicans
    despotic tyranny!- orthodox cessation submitted
    sentiments immure!- released to come with it
    portentous!- never I dare speak that tounge
    ability to function; Maimed! endure for that weak to come
    accede! you must comply I necessitate only this
    describe the ineffable we share, hold me miss...

    Submitted on 2006-10-27 19:06:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      From the looks of the title you attempted to do the contrary. I enjoyed reading it. It seemed to be about a relationship in which the girl was over bearing and controlling, im sure it could be about a lot of things though. NIce work

    keep em coming

    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      So it seems throughout this whole poem that you were trying to go over the top with the abstraction until the end where you kind of loosened up a bit and there is more coherence and flow while keeping the theme of the previous part of the poem. Either you got lazy towards the end, or you finally caught your brilliance.
    | Posted on 2006-10-29 00:00:00 | by PaintTheSkyBlak | [ Reply to This ]

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