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How Could You Do This (diary entry in story)

Author: LossOfHope03
ASL Info:    16/female/USA
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Class/Type: Rant /Serious
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this is a diary entry from my main character of story. as you can see she regrets the relationship that she had with someone because of their violent actions. umm let's see. i mainly just posted it because i wanted to see what kind of response i would get from this so please share your thoughts.

How Could You Do This (diary entry in story)

How could you do this to me? What did I ever do to you? I wanna slap you like you slapped me. I wanna push you like you pushed me. And I wanna kick you like you kicked me.
In the serenity of my room I say this, I scream it into my pillow. But to your face? No, I couldn't possibly. You see right through me and I know it just as much as you do. I can't stand seeing you anywhere. I choose to publically commit suicide before I would even talk to you alone, before I would ever take you back. That's what I tell myself, its what I want to believe. Its how I feel. But you know just as well as I do that I'd take you back in a second, not because I love you, but because I fear you in the worst ways. So sleep tight my love, and remember not to breathe, so I can finally just say goodbye to my fears.

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