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Author: bloodydreamer27
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I was looking at icons and one of an anorexic person showed up and this popped into my head. Tell me what you think


You call them fat so they don't eat,
You say that if they sit they'll break the seat.
They make themselves skinny but they're not good enough,
They cry at home but when your around they're tough.

If they fell they'd shatter to pieces,
With every word you say their weight decreaces.
Now they're too skinny for your taste,
Now with anorexia they are faced.

You made them start but now they can't stop,
And with you their lives they want to swap.
They think your perfect in every single way,
When they look in the mirror they're filled with dismay.

You started this and now want it to end,
It wont so you just hope that its all pretend.
They're going to die and all because of you,
Your words hurt them because they thought they were true.

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Submitted on 2006-10-27 21:09:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  pretty good... and i don't say that often.
| Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
  Very to the point dreamer and your right about all the stuff thrown at these people for males its really the same except with a different set of rules and standards. I hope those that do this see there error and chage there ways after reading this
| Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by ShadowedAngel | [ Reply to This ]

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