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    dots Submission Name: If Only You Would Seedots

    Author: PrincessOfDark
    ASL Info:    17/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.2 - 22/31/25
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1295
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1191

       This poem is about...Hatii. I still feel this way about him. If only he would see it. And give me another chance.

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    dotsIf Only You Would Seedots

    If only you would see
    That I still love you
    With all my heart

    I hear your voice
    I long for it
    Somehow it makes me feel better
    That's how i feel when I am around you

    You made me see
    What true love can be
    You made me believe again
    In myself and others

    When we we done
    I cried myself to sleep
    That night and the rest of the week
    I still do
    Just thinking about you...

    I love you
    With all my heart
    You shared these feelings once
    You probly still do
    Will you tell me if you do?

    I hate being alone
    Wihtout you there is no point in living

    This Love for you will never go away
    My heart is brakeing even more then it allready was

    You know all about me
    I told you everything
    I trusted you
    More than anyone else
    By our third conversation I knew
    I loved you
    You knew it too
    You told me so

    Can't you see what you do to me?
    If only you could see into me heart
    Then you would know

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      it was good..i bascially said somethin close to this to my husband before and we are still together..nice touch..good read
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by DeathsWife | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a touching and wonderful poem about love, Princess! Love is the one thing in life we truly can't get enough of, no matter how much we get! By the way, I'm a Texan too, from the Dallas area!
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      It is great the emotions youve managed to put into this peice, a great bit of work, well done.
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by elseibi | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah... someone said most of that to me, and she was totally full of SH*T so... it is what it is right?
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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